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Many people around the world are still relying on the private car as their major mean of transportation. Describe some of the problems over-reliance on cars can cause, and suggest some solutionsit

Private
car
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 is one of the most used transportation
mode
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modes
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 in society. The value it offers
considered
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is considered
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 worth it despite being marketed
with
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at
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 a high price by
car
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 users.
However
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, the convenience
followed
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is followed
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 by several issues. The writer will try to break it down, including examples and solutions to
this
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 matter.
Firstly
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,
car
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 usage
clearly
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is clearly
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 one of the biggest reasons
traffic
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 is getting
worst
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worse
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.
Although
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 there are public transportation options available, some
people
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 still prefer using private cars wherever they go, even when the distance is
near
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short
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.
For example
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,
traffic
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 in rush hour often delays
people
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to get
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from getting
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 to their destination.
As a result
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, many
people
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 get frustrated in rush hour and
decided
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decide
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 to wait until the
traffic
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 is better.
Secondly
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, private cars increase air and
sound
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noise
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 pollution. Poor air quality really affects health
condition
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conditions
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, which
mean
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means
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 it's
also
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 affecting
people
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's
life
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apply
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quality.
On the other hand
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, sound pollution frequently arises
everytime
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every time
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.
For instance
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,
people
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 like to honk when they are trapped in
traffic
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 or facing a careless driver on the road. It's clearly unpleasant for the
people
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 and
also
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 terrible for the environment. As a
respond
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 to these matters, it
need
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needs
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 serious participation and commitment from both the
citizen
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citizens
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 and the government to lower the use of private cars.
Instead
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,
people
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 need to start using public transportation.
This
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 will help
reducing
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reduce
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 the
traffic
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 and improve air quality as well. To
summarize
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summarise
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, private
car
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 users have to be wiser
on
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in
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its
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their
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 usage to solve the problems.

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structure
Add a clear opening that states what you will discuss and a short plan.
content
Put two or three clear problems and two or three steps to solve them.
content
Give more details or examples for each point so the reader can see why the problem matters.
structure
Use a short ending that sums up the point you have made.
grammar
Fix big grammar errors and the wrong forms, like ‘respond’ and ‘mode’.
coherence
Use linking words to show order and relation, like First, Then, Also, But, So.
vocabulary
Keep words simple and do not use hard words; stick to basic, common words.
content
The topic is clear and you state two main issues.
structure
There is a closing line that sums up your view.
content
Some good examples like rush hour are used.
Answer the 'Problem and Solution' topic

Problem-and-solution essays fall naturally into two parts, the first describing and exploring the problem, the second setting out the solution or solutions.

You essay structure should look something like this:

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – Problems
  • Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • One of the first problems of the...
  • Another problem that needs to be considered...
  • A possible solution to this problem would be...
  • One immediate practical solution is to...

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