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Band 4.5

Cities around the world are continuing to expand as people leave the countryside. Some people prefer to live in the city while others prefer to live in the countryside. Discuss both the views.

In
this
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 contemporary world, a large number of
people
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 have started moving into the
city
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area
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,
becuase
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because
 of
that
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this
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 reason
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the geoghraphical
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geoghraphical
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geographical
area
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 of
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city
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the city
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 is
keep
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apply
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increasing.
Although
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,
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apply
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 a few
people
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prefers
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prefer
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 to spend their lives in rural
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area
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areas
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. The reasons for both the views
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along
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, along
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 with my
opinion
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opinion,
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 are discussed in
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the below
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below paragraphs
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paragraphs below
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.
From
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last
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the last
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 few years,
a
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the
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 number of
people
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 living in
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city
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the city
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area
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is
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has been
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 increasing,
which results
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resulting
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into
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in
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 the expansion of
urban
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the urban
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area
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. The main reason behind
this
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urbanization
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urbanisation
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 is the
facilities
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 that
people
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 can experience
on
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in
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 developed
ground
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areas
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, still
majority
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the majority
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 of countryside
areas
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 are lacking with basic
facilities
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.
Metropolitian
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Metropolitan
area
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 provides quick public transport,
advanced
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an advanced
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 healthcare system, entertainment
facilities
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 and
luxury
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a luxury
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 lifestyle.
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, developed
area
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 offers more opportunities for employment than rural
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area
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areas
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. To exemplify, a person can live
better
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a better
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 lifestyle if they have a good source of income and
a
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apply
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basic
facilities
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.
However
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, there are
few
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a few
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people
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 who
prefers
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prefer
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 to stay in
countryside
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the countryside
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.
According to
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 some
people
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,
metropolitian
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metropolitan
areas
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 are more
conjusted
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congested
 and polluted than rural
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area
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areas
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.
Although
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,
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apply
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 it is undeveloped land,
still it
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it still
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 provides
peaceful
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a peaceful
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 environment and
healthy
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a healthy
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 lifestyle.
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, a village named Bhal, where residents can access organic food and a clean atmosphere that helps to live
healthy
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a healthy
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 and productive life.
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 to
this
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, remote
area
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 offers
opened
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an open
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 environment, where
people
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 can share their emotions and challenges with each other. In conclusion,
Some
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some
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people
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 choose to live in developed
areas
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 because of the
facilities
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 they can access, others
prefers
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prefer
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 to spend it in undeveloped
areas
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 to maintain their healthy and productive
lifestlye
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lifestyle
. In my opinion,
city
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lifestlye
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lifestyle
 plays
very
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a very
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 significant role in
supportting
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supporting
people
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's ambitions by providing good
ameneties
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amenities
 and
opportunites
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opportunities
 to grow up.

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task response
Plan your essay. Say your view for both sides and state your own view at the end.
language
Use short and clear words. Check spelling and make full sentences.
content
Give more detail for each point and use a real example for each view.
coherence
Link ideas with easy words like first, also, but, then.
grammar
Check use of noun and verb forms (for example 'people', 'is/are').
content
The writer tries to talk about both sides and give a view.
structure
There is a clear end that shows the writer's view.
language
Some parts read well with easy words.
Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • urbanization
  • metropolitan areas
  • economic opportunities
  • career advancement
  • healthcare facilities
  • cultural diversity
  • countryside
  • tranquil environment
  • cost of living
  • close-knit communities
  • rural areas
  • housing affordability
  • social amenities
  • employment prospects
  • cultural vibrancy
  • hustle and bustle
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