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Some people think history has little or nothing to offer, while others say the study of the past helps us understand the present. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

There is considerable debate about whether the study of history is
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beneficial or
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enables us to comprehend the present.
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 both schools of thought have their valid points, I am inclined to agree with the latter view. Advocates of the perspective that learning about the past can offer almost nothing mention some reasons as an explanation. The key cause lies in the fact that it focuses too much on memorisation, not on skills,
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 as critical thinking;
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, history is sometimes considered useless.
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, it is believed that old events
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 not provide solutions to modern problems, including cybercrime, climate change, and AI regulation.
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, there are those who claim that knowledge of the past allows
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 understand the current times and they give factors for
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. First and foremost, it teaches to prevent the
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 before.
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 of empires gave a lesson that societies cannot be ruled without justice and civil rights. An additional cause is that it indicates
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 identity. Nowadays, 80% of countries in the world
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 it a compulsory subject in schools.
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, the field provides people with the knowledge of what events which triggered the evolution of the Earth and humanity took place. Thanks to the information about the Silk Road individuals have currently, they now know why
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Central Asia was the crossroads of cultures. In conclusion, despite these arguments, I remain convinced that the study of the past has so much to offer.

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grammar
Fix basic grammar errors and check subject-verb and plural forms.
coherence
Make ideas easy to read by linking with simple words like and, but, also and by using clear topic sentences.
content
Give clear examples. Use small, real facts or events that fit the point.
grammar
Keep the same tense and spell common words right.
task response
Clear attempt to discuss both views.
coherence
Opinion is stated and a conclusion is given.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • historical context
  • civilizations
  • conflicts
  • philosophies
  • informed decisions
  • geopolitical tensions
  • bias
  • subjective
  • inaccurate representation
  • irrelevant
  • societal improvement
  • learning from mistakes
  • civil rights movements
  • resilience
  • strategy
  • identity
  • values
  • repository of lessons
  • wisdom
  • critical thinking
  • empathy
  • interconnected world
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