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At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relativity large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people. Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?

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recent times, many countries have witnessed a rise in the ratio of younger adults compared to those in their
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.
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 trend has certain advantages, it has some drawbacks too. Both advantages and disadvantages will be discussed
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 essay. One of the demerits of having
high
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 number of younger individuals in a country is the lack of
exprience
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experience
. Many young
people
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 have just started their career or started taking
responsbility
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responsibility
of
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thier
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their
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,
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 having no prior knowledge or
skill-set
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 to handle the duty can lead to some undesirable outcomes.
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, A manager with 2 years
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exprience
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experience
 can
effciently
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efficiently
 manage
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 office than
fresher
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a fresher
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 with 2 months of
exprience
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experience
.
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, many young
adult
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adults
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 have an impatient temperament which can lead to some unfavourable results. Many
people
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 from the younger generation lack the ability to stay calm or peaceful in stressful conditions.
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, they can lose
thier
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their
 capability to think clearly and make wise
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, having high young population has numerous merits as well.
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, the country will have
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 energetic taskforce.
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 is because a lot of young
people
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 are very healthy and fit compared to their
middle aged
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 or older counterparts, who suffer from various comorbidities.
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, being physically and mentally strong can help younger
people
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 to work for longer
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 without getting exhausted.
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, younger
people
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 are more
research driven
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. The reason for
this
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younger
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that younger
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 minds are extremely curious and, in
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search of something new.
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,
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this
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these
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 research-oriented skills can aid in
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 or development of a nation for its betterment.
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, Mark Zukerburg invented Facebook when he was extremely young, which significantly contributed to the
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 and political development of his nation. In conclusion, there are certain disadvantages of more younger population in a nation
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 as the risk of being
inexprienced
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inexperienced
 and lacking
patience
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the patience
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 to manage difficult
situation
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situations
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.
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, the advantages of having a physically and mentally efficient task-force and, more innovative citizens
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 far more beneficial.

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task response
Strengthen your view by making a clear stand in the end and add steady proof for your main points.
content
The essay looks at both sides of the topic.
structure
Clear signs to guide the reader, like 'First', 'Secondly', 'Nevertheless', 'In conclusion'.
Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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