The graph below gives information on the differences in clothing exports from three different countries

The graph displays the proportion of three countries' clothing exports in
dollars
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. It clearly shows that Myanmar has the lowest amount
than
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among
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other countries,
while
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Colombia
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is the highest among all.
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,
Japan
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and
Colombia
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have similar starting
point
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points
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. Myanmar,
on the other hand
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, started
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from zero in 1999.
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, it climbed up real fast up to 950
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dollars
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in 2001
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then
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followed by
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fall and
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up with the lowest export total with 450
million
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dollars
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in total. Throughout the years,
Colombia
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experienced
slight
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a slight
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increase and reached its peak at 700
million
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dollars
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.
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make
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Colombia
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still
has
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have
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higher
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a higher
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amount of exports than
Japan
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. Meanwhile,
Japan
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had gradual changes over the years
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, with
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below 500
million
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dollars
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in 2003. Despite its unnoticeable changes,
Japan
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still
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is still
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in the second position, higher than Myanmar.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words dollars, colombia, japan, million with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • clothing exports
  • country
  • highest
  • lowest
  • rise
  • rise steadily
  • increase
  • fall
  • decrease
  • grow
  • drop
  • change
  • stay the same
  • peak
  • reach a peak
  • hit a high
  • gap
  • difference
  • big gap
  • narrow gap
  • widen gap
  • compared with
  • in contrast to
  • whereas
  • over the period
  • from ... to ...
  • trend
  • pattern
  • overall
  • in general
  • year
  • data
  • show
  • indicate
  • point out
  • lead
  • lead in exports
  • top country
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