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📊 The bar chart shows the number of cars per 1000 people in 5 European countries in 3 years and compares with the European average.

The chart illustrates the data about the quantity of cars for
each
Correct determiner usage
every
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 thousand inhabitants of 5 various countries in Europe in 2005, 2009,
2015
Correct word choice
and 2015
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.
Overall
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,
the
Correct article usage
apply
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Use synonyms
country
Fix capitalization
Country
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 5 is full of major figures
,
Punctuation problem
;
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 it was dominant in all years.In 2005, the rate of
country
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 5 represented about 920,
while
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 it was near 700 in
country
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 3
Punctuation problem
,
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which is substantial.
In contrast
Linking Words
,
country
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 one had minor figures 300, 400 and 300 in 2005, 2009,
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and 2015
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2015
Punctuation problem
2015,
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 respectively.
While
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 the indication of
country
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 5 was 850 in 2009,
the
Correct article usage
apply
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 countries 2 and 3 were near 600.In 2015, 1000 was indicated by
country
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 5, followed by
country
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 4 with 620 and
other
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others
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 below 600.The
country
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 4 represented the same rate of 600 from
initial
Correct article usage
the initial
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until
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year until
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 the final year.The average of all countries
were
Correct subject-verb agreement
was
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 640, 620 and 790 in 20005, 2009 and
2015
Punctuation problem
2015,
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 relatively

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words country with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "represented" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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