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The bar chart below show the number of hours each teacher spent teaching in different schools in four different countries in 2001

The bar chart provides information about the
number
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 of
hours
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 each teacher spent teaching in four schools in Japan, Spain, Ireland, and the USA in 2001.
Overall
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, it is clear from the chart that the
number
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 of
hours
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 in upper secondary is the biggest trend in the countries and in the USA is the highest rate among these countries. Looking at the chart for more details, on
Island
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the Island
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, the
number
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 of
hours
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 was lower than others , about 540,
then
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 it slowly increased to 600 in lower secondary , and in it will rise by around 310 in upper secondary. What is more, the
number
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 of
hours
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 in Jaban was 600 in primary, and it steadily went up to 650 at the same time in Iceland in lower secondary.
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, it has risen more in the USA by about 1200.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, hours with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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