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Some people think that it is best to live in a horizontal city while others think of a vertical city. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

When it comes to
ideal
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the ideal
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place
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 to live
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both
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, both
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 the horizontal and vertical
city
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.I think
both
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 are good depending on each person's needs.If you want to live
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in the
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the
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a
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city
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which
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with
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less citizen
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fewer citizens
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,you can choose a
horizonal
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horizontal
city
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.But if you like
crowd
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the crowd
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,you can choose the other. In my opinion,the horizontal
city
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also
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is also
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a
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an
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 ideal
place
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 to live,where peace to combat all
of
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apply
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stress to bring a significant positive energy.Because it is a residential
area
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.That’s why it
reduce
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reduces
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a
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the
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 crime rate and
increase
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increases
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security
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the security
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 rate.
Beside
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Besides
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,when we live
in
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apply
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there ,you communicate and connect between residents
due to
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 the absence of high-rise dividing walls.We can view a horizontal design, the areas can easily blend in with nature, creating a living
space
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 in harmony with trees, vegetation and green areas. Because of the green
space
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, the air here is
also
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 fresher.Alternatively,
It
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it
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have
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has
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a
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apply
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many
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service
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services
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 for
resident
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residents
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.
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,it has a park for
a child
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children
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,
medical
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a medical
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area
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,
store
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a store
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 and
supermarket
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a supermarket
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 .Many
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service
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services
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arranges
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are arranged
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 around residential areas
that
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is
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are
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comfortable
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convenient
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or
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for
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resident
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residents
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 when they don’t go
so
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too
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 far.The horizontal
city
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 is
a
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the
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 best for live which
live
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life
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spacious
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is spacious
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 and comfortable.
On the other hand
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,
The
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the
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 vertical
city
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also
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is also
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same
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the same
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the
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as the
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 horizontal
city
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but
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, but
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 it
have
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has
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 advantages and
disanvantages
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disadvantages
.As if, high population density
,
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apply
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It
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apply
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 leads to the emergence of high-rise building models
such
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 as vertical cities.Solving the housing shortage problem.When we live
in
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apply
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there,we can have a small
area
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such
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 as a department.That’s why we
can
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don't
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 have not many
space
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 for family.If you want more
space
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 in
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area
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the area
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,you can pay more money.But it has a big disadvantage is
fear
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the fear
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 of height.A few person has
a
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an
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 intense fear of height.When we look down at the ground,
you
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we
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 will
dizzy
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feel dizzy
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 and
nausea
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nauseated
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.I think
that is
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 a big problem to not
solve
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solved
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.The vertical
city
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also
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 has
a
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apply
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many
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service
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services
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 like the horizontal
city
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but
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, but
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 the
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service
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services
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 in there so more better
than
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apply
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.
For example
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,
The
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the
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 medical
center
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centre
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,
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apply
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It
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apply
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 has many modern devices in there.
Beside
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,it has
big
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a big
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suoermarket
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supermarket
,where
sell
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they sell
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 anything
including
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, including
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 imported
thing
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things
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.
That
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apply
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of
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Above
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 all,
It
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it
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 is a great
place
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 to live when we want to live in
sumptuous
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a sumptuous
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,modern. In conclusion,
both
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two
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apply
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place
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places
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is
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apply
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a great to live.Each has
it
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its
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 own value.As if,
The
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the
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 horizontal
city
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bring
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brings
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 a lot of green energy.The other
bring
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brings
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 a lot of modern
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service
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services
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 or
comfortable
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comfort
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 when
go
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going to
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 work. In general,
both
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 places are
good
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good,
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 it just depends on which one you want more. Each one gives you the best benefits.

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structure
Add a clear plan: an intro, then the two views, then your own view, and a short conclusion.
cohesion
Use linking words to show how ideas fit together, such as 'first', 'also', 'but', 'for example'.
grammar
Make a few simple, short sentences. Fix mistakes in word order and spelling.
content
Give one clear example for each view to support it.
style
Keep a calm, formal tone and simple wording so your message is easy to follow.
idea
You give both sides and you state your own view at the end.
structure
The plan shows you know what to discuss; you finish with a view.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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