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Some people prefer to carefully plan activities in their free time others think it’s a waste of time. Discuss both views and give your answer?

In my opinion, some people can prefer planning how to spend their free time, but it can
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 be people which thinks that it is a useless waste of
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. They think that just scrolling the social media’s in their phones is the most interesting and useful thing. Of course, not everyone thinks like that , as folk who actually enjoy planning and doing something useful and fascinating. People prefer planning, ‘cause they understand that just doing nothing is boring and annoying. I guess they can enjoy playing games outside, or go swimming, or help their grandparents , for example. Actually, they are right in some sense, because just sitting at home and doing nothing is a waste of your life. You have to enjoy it and make everything that will be remembered and awesome.
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, it’s not important , it’s kind of helping or studying, but things like exploring, swimming in lakes and playing hide and seek with a flashlight in the dark. That’s how I was planning my free hour with my friends. As I was saying, not everyone likes planning their free time. It can be folks who just want to sit with gadgets and scroll social
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 as in YouTube, TikTok, Twitter and else.

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structural
Plan your essay. Start with a short intro. Say you will discuss two views and what you think.
organization
Put one main idea in each paragraph. Use a clear plan.
cohesion
Use linking words to show how ideas go from one to the next (for example, first, also, but, finally).
content
Give a simple example for each main idea to back it up.
grammar
Check grammar and use short, clean sentence.
content
You show balance by naming both sides.
style
Your voice is clear and easy to read.
content
There are ideas about planning and time with friends.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • spontaneity
  • efficiency
  • maximize
  • experience
  • quality time
  • unexpected adventures
  • goals
  • stress and anxiety
  • flexibility
  • fulfilling
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