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Band 4.5

Government and Big companies should work together to reverse environment damage, rather than making individuals responsible for that. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

The statement that
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 individuals are not to be held responsible for the reversal of the
damage
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 done to the environment,
instead
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 governmental authorities and corporate companies should collaborate for
this
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 work. I believe that the idea could
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 to be counterproductive. I do not fully support the suggestion,
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 do I deny the perks of it all. I will explain my opinion in the following paragraphs. The question is not
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 whether big conglomerate bodies
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 or
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single individuals should be
resposible
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responsible
 for the betterment of our surroundings. The question lies in
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wheather
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whether
 either of them would be successful in doing so. Logically, these multiworker companies and the administrative
aurthorities
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authorities
 have way more resources and labour to
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work with efficiency. Bigger problems like climate
changes
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change
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 and air quality can be better
manged
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managed
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 by these
organisation
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organisations
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, as
it
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they
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 will need
equipments
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equipment
 and information that are not accessible
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general
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 public.
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Furthermore
, they have more connections which can lead to
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 organised campaign for certain tasks, like area trash cleaning or tree planting for
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a better
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 atmosphere.
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,
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large
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a large
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amount
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number
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 of people working together at the same time, for
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 same
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 can give excellent results within a limited time frame
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, espaecially
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espaecially
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especially
 by luring workers to do so with the help of bonuses.
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 it can
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 prove quite challenging. Making a crowd work in
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 organised manner is no small feat.
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damage
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 to the environment is not a momentary problem
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 it is a continuous threat. Having only a limited number
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 working for a limited amount of time will be a temporary solution. In the long
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this
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 can turn into
cycle
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a cycle
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 of constant
damage
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 and reversal.
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,
enviornment
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environment
 is not
an
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 personal or a group
responsbility
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responsibility
. It is a duty of all
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those who dwell on it
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 to keep it healthy and prosperous. It is true
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 that a single person cannot make a huge difference to the environment, but
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 if every single person starts working, it might actually make a change.
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, cleaning their own yards, helping neighbours to keep it clean, planting trees in nearby areas whenever it is possible and permissible. Small actions can make bigger impacts. In conclusion, government bodies and corporate companies should start working together for
damage
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 reversal
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 each person working towards
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maintainance
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maintenance
 by themselves
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 will not only cause the reversal but
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 cease the active
damage
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 caused to
earth
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the earth
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task response
Plan your answer. State your view in one line in intro, then give two clear reasons with simple examples. End with a short conclusion.
coherence
Make idea links clear. Use small bridge words like and, but, also, then. Keep one idea per paragraph and start each with a clear point.
content
Some attempt is made to discuss both sides.
content
There are examples and real life ideas used.
Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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