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The diagram below shows how electricity is generated in a hydroelectric power station. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The picture displays the
process
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 of
electricity
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 production in a plant named a hydroelectric power station.
Overall
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, the whole
process
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 is conducted during the day and night. In the daytime, it flows
water
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 downward direction and at night, it is pumped upward. The
process
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 begins when in the day the river
water
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 reaches the dam, which is a high-level reservoir of
water
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. The dam is always open during the day but closed at night. To enable
further
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 processing ,
water
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 is flown down at high speed for the generation of
electricity
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. By
this
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process
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, a force is produced for the working of the generator with the assistance of turbines, which is a power station. After production of
electricity
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, it is transformed with the help of power lines
to
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into
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 the national grid. Now,
this
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electricity
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 can be used for many purposes, including domestic, agricultural and industrial. The second
process
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 is a reversible
process
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 in which
water
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 is reversed again from the low-level reservoir to the high-level reservoir. During
the
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nighttime time H20 is pumped again into the dam with the help of reversible turbines.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words process, electricity, water with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • hydroelectric power station
  • reservoir
  • potential energy
  • mechanical energy
  • electrical energy
  • turbine
  • generator
  • renewable energy
  • fossil fuels
  • emissions
  • power lines
  • gate-controlled tunnels
  • gravity-driven
  • transformation
  • clean energy source
  • sustainable
  • recycled water
  • mountainous area
  • activate
  • transmit
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