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The bar chart below shows the number of houses built per year in two cities, Derby and Nottingham, Between 2000 and 2009. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.

The diagram illustrates
comparison
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a comparison
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 between
Derby
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City
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 and Nottingham
City
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 in
builing
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building
house
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houses
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 from 2000 to 2009.
Overall
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,
Derby
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City
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 had
upward
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an upward
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 trend
on
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in
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 the
number
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 of
houses
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 built. In other
condition
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conditions
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, Nottingham
City
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 had
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a fluctuation
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fluctuation
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fluctuating
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 trend in building
houses
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.
At
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In
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 the
inital
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initial
 period,
Derby
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City
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 started to build nearly 50
houses
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which
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, which
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 had
relatively
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a relatively
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same
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similar
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 amount until 2001.
The
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In the
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 couple of years, 2002 and 2003,
Derby
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City
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 increased the
number
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 of
houses
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with
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by
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 roughly 80 and above 100
respectively
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, respectively
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.
However
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, next four years, the
number
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 of
houses
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 had
steady
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a steady
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 trend. The difference condition
was happened
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occurred
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 in 2008
which
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, which
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 had dramatically increased nearly 275
houses
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bulit
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built
. The
number
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 of
houses
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 still raised until 2009
just
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was just
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 below 350
houses
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.
On the other hand
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, in 2000 and 2001, the
number
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 of
houses
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 in Nottingham
City
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 was higher than
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Derby
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in Derby
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City
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.
Then
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, the
amount
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number
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 of
houses
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 dropped in 2002, around 20
houses
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, and was
overtaked
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overtaken
 by
Derby
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City
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.
Since
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From
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 2003
until
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to
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 2005, the ratio of
houses
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 grew moderately from nearly 50 to around 75
houses
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 built. In 2006, the
number
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 of
houses
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 built
plunge
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plunged
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 again, nearly 0
houses
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. After that year, The
City
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 had
boom
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a boom
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 in 2007 and
double
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doubled
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 in
number
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 of
houses
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from
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in
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Derby
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City
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. The next year, the
number
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 of built
house
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houses
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 had
plunge
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plunged
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, which was
same
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the same
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 condition
in
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as in
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 2006.
The
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In the
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last
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 period, the
number
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 of
houses
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 steeply increased
around
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by around
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 250
houses
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words derby, city, number, houses with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 9 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "plunge" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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