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Band 4

The most important aim of science should be to improve people's lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Some argue that the most significant duty of
science
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 should be focusing on enhancing people’s quality of
life
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. I strongly agree with that and think the final result of scientific research has main effect
to
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humans
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human
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life
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I
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. I
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completely agree and believe that the outcomes of scientific research have a significant impact on human
life
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. On the one hand, one of the important
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science
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areas of scientific
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researches
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research
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are
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is
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 on the healthcare system.
Firstly
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, searching
on
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for
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 medicines can help
to
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apply
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peoples
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people's
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 sickness.
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, 100 years ago,
invention
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the invention
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 of antibiotics had medical advancements and significant impact on people who were sick
and
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, and
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 if they hadn’t used
antibiotics
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antibiotics,
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 they would have died quickly.
Secondly
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,
scientists
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scientists,
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while
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conduct
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conducting
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 research on
radio
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radioactive
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 active as
new
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a new
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 invention for
bomb
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bombs
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, they understand the connection between
the
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apply
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cancer and
the radioactive
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radiation
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.
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, another
invest
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 in
science
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 is
the
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apply
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technology, which
also
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 has
impact
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an impact
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 on
quality
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the quality
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 of
lives
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life
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.
First,
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one of the
most
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biggest
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problem
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problems
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 for human lives is moving. It is hard to move
in
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apply
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long
distance
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distances
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 the technology helps
the
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apply
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individuals
to
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apply
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move easily with technological
breakthrough
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breakthroughs
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on
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in
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transportations
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transportation
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.
Furthermore
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, new gadgets like mobile phones
in spired
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inspired
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 the fact that
make
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makes
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 communication
more
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apply
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easier than before
the
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, the
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 mobile phone
keep
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keeps
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 people informed with news In conclusion, I think
scientific
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the scientific
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 community should
fucus
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focus
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 on
improve
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improving
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 human well-being.
In addition
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, all of the researches in every part of the
science
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 always have direct connections with quality of
life
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because
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, because
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 of that
the
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apply
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new
researches
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research
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 should
be rise
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arise
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 in future .

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strategy
Plan your essay with a clear start, middle, and end. State your view in a short intro, give two or three clear ideas in the body, and finish with a short conclusion.
language
Use simple, correct grammar and link words to show how ideas connect (for example, First, Also, But, Finally).
organisation
Each paragraph should have one main idea and a small example to support it.
content
You show a clear view that science should help life.
content
You touch on real topics like medicines and tech.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • crucial role
  • technological advancements
  • medical discoveries
  • life-changing inventions
  • innovations
  • solutions to human problems
  • enhancing quality of life
  • improvement of healthcare
  • transportation
  • communication
  • agriculture
  • energy sectors
  • eradication of diseases
  • prolongation of life expectancy
  • global challenges
  • climate change
  • overpopulation
  • food security
  • developed world
  • underprivileged communities
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