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Band 3

Would you prefer to live in a traditional house or in a modern apartment building? Use specific reasons and details to support your choice.

There is no denying the fact that
people
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 think that living in an old
house
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 is
more
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better than
modern
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a modern
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 apartment building.
While
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 it is a commonly held belief that many
people
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 tend to live in a traditional
house
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 rather than other choices, there is
also
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 an argument that opposes it. In my opinion, I consider that spending my life in a traditional building
have
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has
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 many benefits
insted
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instead
 of
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a modren
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modren
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modern
 one.
To begin
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 with, traditional houses have a great atmosphere.
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, you will have
good
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a good
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mode
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mood
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 and great energy inside of it.
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, you will remember the good moments that you had in the past.
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, many
people
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 like to spend their trip in
traditional
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a traditional
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house
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 rather than hotels. Another point to consider, if you live in an old building ,
this
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 will improve your mental health. It is
also
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 possible to say that when you are in a traditional
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house
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house,
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 you may have less access to the internet.
Moreover
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, you will use your phone less often.
For instance
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, many experts suggest that if you want to reduce your
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for
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of
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phones
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phons
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phons,
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 you should go to
place with a
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a place with
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 few access to
the
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apply
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Wi-fi
like
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, like
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old
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an old
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 building. In conclusion, despite
people
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 having different views, I believe that spending my time in
traditional
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a traditional
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house
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 is better than
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a modren
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modren
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modern
 apartment, because it has many advantages like health in general.
While
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 living in an old
house
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,
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this
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one
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 could develop many skills
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such
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, such
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 as creative thinking.

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organization
Make your main ideas clearer and add more detail to each point.
cohesion
Use linking words to show how ideas go together.
grammar
Check spellings and use simple, correct words.
content
Add one or two real examples that fit the task.
content
You share a clear view that you like old houses.
structure
Main parts are the intro, body and conclusion.
Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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