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The maps below shows university sports courts in 1990 and now.

The
two
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 maps illustrate how university sports
courts
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changes
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have changed
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 from 1990 to now.
Overall
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, half of the
courts
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' layout
remain
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remains
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 the same,
while
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 there
is
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are
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 some newly added
courts
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 over the years. On the right side of the
area
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, the
two
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 main differences are the development of
outdoor
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an outdoor
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 pool becoming
indoor
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an indoor
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 pool and the movement of
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the
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changing room and
tennis
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 court. Now, the
tennis
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courts
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 were moved to
left
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the left
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 side of the
area
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 with
two
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 newly added
courts
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,
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;
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 meanwhile, the previous location
used
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was used
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 as
fitness
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a fitness
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 centre. The changing room
move
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moved
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 to a smaller
area
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 near the reception
beside
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, beside
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 the
cafe
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cafe,
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that
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which
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remain
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remains
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 located as it was. In the
1990
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1990s
, quarter of the
area
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 was used for
park
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a park
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 and the other quarter for
car
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a car
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 park.
However
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, those spaces were already gone and replaced by
basketball
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a basketball
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 court and four
tennis
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courts
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. Another significant change is
there
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that there
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 was a new segmentation that
divide
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divided
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 the whole
area
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 into
two
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 main areas. The first
area
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 included
indoor
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an indoor
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 pool, cafe, changing room, and fitness centre,
while
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 the other consists of basketball and
tennis
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courts
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. In conclusion, the university sports
courts
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 have expanded the number of
courts
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, not only to facilitate more students, but
also
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 to include more sports.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words two, courts, area, tennis with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "moved" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remain" was used 2 times.
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