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The chart below shows the changes that took place in three different areas of crime in Newport city centre from 2003 to 2012.

The line chart illustrates the number of
enquiries
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 received by a tourist office in the United Kingdom between
January
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 and
June
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, through three different methods
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 in person, by letter/email and by telephone.
Overall
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, in-person
enquiries
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 rose sharply throughout the
period
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 and became the most common method by
June
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,
while
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enquiries
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 by letter or email steadily declined. Telephone
enquiries
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 fluctuated
initially
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 but ended the
period
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 as the second most frequently used method. In
January
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, around 400
enquiries
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 were made in person, after which
this
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 figure grew gradually to about 800 by March. It
then
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 increased rapidly, reaching just over 1200 in April and peaking at approximately 1900 in
June
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.
Enquiries
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 made by telephone were the highest in
January
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, at roughly 900.
This
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 number fell slightly to 800 in February, before rising to 1000 in both March and April. It continued to increase, reaching about 1400 in May and 1600 in
June
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,
although
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 it remained below the level of in-person
enquiries
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 for the final three months.
In contrast
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,
enquiries
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 sent by letter or email declined consistently over the six-month
period
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. Starting at just under 800 in
January
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, the number dropped gradually each month, reaching around 400 by
June
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, making it the least preferred method by the end of the
period
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words enquiries, january, june, period with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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