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Band 4

The line graph shwo house price between 1977 and 2014.

The given line graph illustrates the amount of money spent on buying accommodation in three countries,
Country
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 A,
Country
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 B, and
Country
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 C, over a period of 37 years, starting from 1997
Overall
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,
although
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 the amount of money spent on housing increased for three countries over the timescale, the figure for
Country
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 A consistently remained higher. At the beginning of the period, the cost of housing in
Country
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 A was around 150 dollars. From 1997 to 2000, it went up moderately. After that, it peaked at just over 500 in 2003.
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, apart from a brief decline between 2003 and 2006, the number climbed up to finish at 600. Turning to other countries,
Country
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 B and C began at around 100 and just under 100, respectively, and they continued the same trends within 8 years. After that, there was a slight reduction just above 250, and suddenly it climbed up to reach 500.
Finally
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,
Country
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 C continued to rise, apart from ups and downs during
three
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the three
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 years, and recorded just over 250 in 2014.

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structure
Improve by making clear par lines: 1 for A, 1 for B and 1 for C. Start with a short view of all data.
accuracy
Check all facts in the graph. Use only numbers you see from the chart.
conclusion
Add a clear end line to show what the graph means.
cohesion
Use more linking words to show how points compare.
language
Keep words simple and clear; use easy phrases.
content
The essay tries to cover all three countries.
data
It uses some data to back points.
structure
An overall view is given at the start.
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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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