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Writing Samples
Band 3

The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018.

The graph envisions how
the
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apply
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people spend their
week’s
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weekly
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 salary during 1968 and 2018. It can be seen that the biggest amount of income was spent on food
and
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, and
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least
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the least
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 money was spent on fuel and power. In
1968
Punctuation problem
1968,
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 35% of salaries were spent on food, which is almost 5 times more than household
goods
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, personal
goods
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 and transport. The least amount of money (6%) was allocated
on
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to
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 fuel and power. During
2018
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2018,
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 the budget that was spent on food decreased by 50% and went from 35% to 17%.
However
Linking Words
, leisure and housing had a sharp increase during
this
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 period. Leisure went up by 12% and housing by 9%.
On the other hand
Linking Words
, household
goods
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 stayed at the same level as of the year
1968
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1968,
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while
Linking Words
 fuel and power, clothing and footwear and personal
goods
Use synonyms
 faced a decrease compared to 1968.

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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words goods with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Weekly income
  • Expenditure
  • Consumption patterns
  • Cost of living
  • Discretionary spending
  • Inflation
  • Economic indicators
  • Demographics
  • Socio-economic factors
  • Technology advancements
  • Government policies
  • Consumerism
  • Lifestyle changes
  • Fiscal habits
  • Budget allocation
  • Financial priorities
  • Societal trends
  • Purchasing power
  • Income distribution
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