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Band 4.5

You should spend about 40 minutes on this lask. It is important for everyone, including young people, to save money for their future. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write al least 250 words.

The days of work per week should be
lesser
Correct word choice
fewer
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and
Punctuation problem
, and
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 employees must have
extended
Correct article usage
an extended
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weekend
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. I totally agree that
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weekend
Correct article usage
the weekend
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 should be longer for workers, so they can have more
time
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 for their
life
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lives
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. In my point of view,
number
Correct article usage
the number
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 of working days should be reduced to four days only.
This
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 reduction will lead to
extend
Wrong verb form
extending
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 the
weekend
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, which will offer more
time
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 for
workers
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workers'
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life
Fix the agreement mistake
lives
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. Many employees face
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this
Correct determiner usage
the
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 issue of not having
time
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 for themselves
as well as
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 for their families. In some cases,
this
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 might affect
on
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apply
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the
worker
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worker's
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 efficiency and
make
Verb problem
put
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 extra stress on him.
However
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, if
worker
Correct article usage
a worker
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have
Correct subject-verb agreement
has
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 more
time
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 to spend with his family and friends, the employee will be in
relaxed
Correct article usage
a relaxed
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 mode,which will be reflected
on
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in
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 his efficiency in the job.
In addition
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, having
extra
Correct article usage
an extra
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off day
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day off
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 will be reflected on the public economy by increasing the buying strength in the local market.
For example
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, people will go
for
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apply
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camping, so they will need to buy many things from the local market for their trip.
Also
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, having
longer
Correct article usage
a longer
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weekend
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 will boost the relationship between family members because they spend more
time
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 together.
On the other hand
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, some business owners will not agree with
this
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 opinion because they want their
worker
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workers
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 to spend more
time
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 in their job to increase their profit. In reality, they see one part of the story, which is the working
time
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.
This
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 is a
misunderstand
Replace the word
misunderstanding
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 because employees will approach more goals when they are in
good
Correct article usage
a good
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 mood rather than stressed. Companies should look
to
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at
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 the
brightest
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bright
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 side of the story to get the benefit from
this
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 point of view. All in all,
extended
Correct article usage
an extended
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weekend
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 is preferable to many people
due to
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 several reasons, which I hardly agree with
them
Correct pronoun usage
apply
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. The advantages of it
is
Correct subject-verb agreement
are
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 much more compared with the disadvantages.

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task response
Be sure to answer the task. Say you agree and give more clear reasons. Also show a small plan for your idea.
coherence
Make the flow clear. Use short lines. Use linking words like 'and', 'but', 'also', 'however' to connect ideas.
content
Add more strong points and clear examples. Use numbers or real facts where possible.
grammar
Fix grammar. Use correct tense and form. Shorter sentences help.
grammar
Check spelling and word use. Say 'weekend' not 'week end' and 'life of workers' not 'workers life'.
content
Clear view that long weekend can help life and mood
examples
Gives small examples like camping and shopping
balance
Mentions both sides by saying some do not agree
Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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