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The graph below shows the number of overseas student came to the UK

The line graph shows the
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number
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 of international learners studying at a UK university between 1995 and 2015.
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of
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number of
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students
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 in North America and Asia increased by 2015,
while
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 the number of
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 in Europe and Africa remained unchanged. As for international studies in Asia and Europe, we started with 50 and 60
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 in 1995. By 2015, the number of
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 in Europe remained unchanged. But there were constant changes between that time. In 2000 and 2010, there was a gradual increase to 55
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. And in Asia, the number of
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 peaked in 2015
to
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at
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 120
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.
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, in Africa and North America, international studies began with 20 and 40
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 in 1995. By 2010, North America
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 a peak of 30
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. By 2015, it was returning to its former appearance. And Africa is gradually decreasing to 35
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 by 2005.
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 it
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 a peak of 70
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 in 2015.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words students with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reaches" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "unchanged" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradual" was used 2 times.
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