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Band 4

Some people think it is more important to spend money on roads and motorways than on ublic transport systems such as railways and trams. To what extent do you agree and disagree?

Many consider spending money
in
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on
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 roads and motorways
is
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 a better idea than using the funds for general transport like railways and trams. I disagree with
this
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 idea, as I believe
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 all of these are
principle
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principal
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 ways of transport, and should be invested in equally. Main roads and motorways have been an ancient way of commuting.
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 with the advancement of
technology
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technology,
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 these routes have been made better, they have been existing for generations
over
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apply
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. Streetways are the only course through which
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 reaching a personal property and an off-road location is made possible.
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, both of these transport
connection
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connections
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 do not need a constant supply of energy,
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 making it cheaper and more
accesible
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accessible
 to
common
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the common
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 public.
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, it gives personal space to a vehicle driver
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 to flexibility in
schedule
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the schedule
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 of choice.
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, it
also
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 has some disadvantages,
such
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 as
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an increase
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increase
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increased
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 crowd in rush hours
leading
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, leading
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 to
slowing down
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a slowdown
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 of traffic.
According to
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 some studies, even though there are various rules and strict laws of motor driving
liscence
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license
 in place, they are a major
location
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cause
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 of accidents leading to loss of human lives.
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,
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 trains and trams give access to a greater number of people, travelling through the same route. They are more
cost affective
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cost-effective
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 than most travelling options.
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, using a car from my home, which is on the peripheral part of the city, going to
city
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the city
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 centre might cost around four times more than simply taking a tram.
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,
they
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 consumption of natural resources
are
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is
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 far greater than that of
tradition
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traditional
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 ways of travel. Taking these
ameneities
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amenities
,
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 can take longer
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 multiple stops and various routes, sometimes needing to board more than one line to reach the destination.
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 making it less
covinient
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convenient
 for people living on the outskirts. In conclusion, all the routes of travelling contain their own pros and cons. Money invested by
government
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the government
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 is
gain
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gained
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 from the
citizen
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citizens
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,
thus
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 making it a more subjected choice than an objective opinion. I disagree
to
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with
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 the
preferance
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preference
of
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for
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 one option of displacement over the other. Expenditure of funds should be done equally
considering
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, considering
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variability
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the variability
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 of the crowd.

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Task response
Be clear on your main idea in the first paragraph and say it again in the end.
Task response
Add a short plan in the introduction and keep to it in the body.
Coherence and cohesion
Use simple links to show cause, effect and contrast (for example, because, but, also, however).
Language quality
Use short sentences and check for small spelling and grammar mistakes.
Idea quality
You state a view and try to weigh both sides.
Content
You give a concrete example about cost in the city vs tram.
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