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Band 5

The charts below show ưhat UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008

the
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The
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 table
illustrate
Correct subject-verb agreement
illustrates
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 the number of
students
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Correct pronoun usage
who graduate
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graduate
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graduated
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 and
postgraduate
Verb problem
pursued postgraduate
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in
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studies in
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UK
Correct article usage
the UK
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 who
not
Verb problem
were not
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involve
Wrong verb form
involved
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 in
full time
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full-time
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 work after college in 2008.
Linking Words
further
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Further
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 study
show
Correct subject-verb agreement
shows
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 the highest number of
students
Use synonyms
 in both
table
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tables
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, for
graduates
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graduate
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students
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 was 29,665
and
Punctuation problem
, and
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 for
postgraduates
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postgraduate
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students
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 was 2,725.
the
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The
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loest
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lowest
 work for postgraduates was voluntary
work
Punctuation problem
work,
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 it was 345, and it is
also
Linking Words
 the
loast
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lowest
 number in
graduates
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graduate
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studets
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students
it
Punctuation problem
, it
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 was 3,500

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words students with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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