Some people think it is better for people to change their career at least once in their life and do different kinds of jobs. Do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

It is a common belief that the change career at least once in their life and doing different kinds of jobs can make positive effect in mind.
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, Some people argue that the change their career at least once is too dangerous. They have two significant reasons: 'different' kinds of jobs already have a lot of risks, too much new challenge bring crucial stress in mind.
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, I fully disagree
this
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common belief

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Your essay shows a view but you miss a clear start and end. Add a short intro that says what you think. End with a short conclusion that restates it.
structure
Use easy links to show how ideas go from one to the next, like first, also, but, because.
grammar
Check the grammar. Change words like 'the change career' to 'changing careers' and 'positive effect on mind' to 'a positive effect on mental health'.
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Add one or two small examples at least. This will show you can use an idea with a detail.
structure
Try to keep one main idea in each paragraph. Do not add too many ideas at once.
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Your basic idea is clear: you disagree with the idea that changing jobs is always good.
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You give a reason: risk and stress from new work.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general
Topic Vocabulary:
  • career
  • job
  • work
  • change
  • switch
  • learn
  • skill
  • grow
  • new
  • different
  • plan
  • decision
  • choice
  • market
  • demand
  • money
  • salary
  • stability
  • risk
  • time
  • effort
  • future
  • success
  • boredom
  • motivation
  • job satisfaction
  • experience
  • prepare
  • advice
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