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The bar chart below shows the US top 10 proccesed food expert markets for last year and six years ago

the
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The
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 bar chart gives details of food
export
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exports
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 in the US
last
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 year and six years ago .
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,towards the end of the period
Canada
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, Canada
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 and
Rest
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the Rest
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 of the world increased significantly. During the
last
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 year ,all countries increased
steadly
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steadily
,
although
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 Canada and
Rest
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the Rest
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 of the World were dominated by meal export markets.The data for food export markets were consistently almost double that
Mexico
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of Mexico
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,
The
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 European Union and Japan, with former rising from over 6.1billion dollars to a peak of 13.2billion dollars. The chart was very different during
seven
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the seven
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 years,when,despite retaining the top position ,Canada dropped back to their initial level and ended the period
only
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with only
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 0.3 billion dollars. Notably ,the drop Rest of the World corresponded with
drammatic
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dramatic
 increases in Hong Kong .

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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