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The bar chart below shows the US top 10 processed food export markets for last year and 6 years ago.

The graph
provide
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provides
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 us information about the ten largest
patners
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partners
 of
USA
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the USA
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 in
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export
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the export
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 of processed food, information
provide
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provided
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 in
billion
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 US$ and for
six
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the six
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years
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 ago and now.
Overall
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, total
export
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incereased
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increased
 in all countries, Mexico and Canada remain the
bigest
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biggest
 figures,
while
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 Hong Kong and Australia stood the lowest. As the bar chart shows, Canada
as
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was
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 the greatest
partner
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partner,
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sustain
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sustaining
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 9.3
billion
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 dollars 6
years
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 ago and up to 13.2 in
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last
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the last
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 year. Mexico experienced normal growth from 4 to 6.1
billion
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 $. The same trend was in the European Union, where
figure
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clmbed
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climbed
 up from 2.6 to 4.4
billion
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 $. Asian countries like Japan and China grew to 2.5 and 2.1, respectively. In
addiction
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addition
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, South Korea's
export
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 was equal to 900
milion
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million
 $ and doubled over the period.
Philippines
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The Philippines
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 and
Australa's
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Australia's
 market
starts
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started
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 from 300
milion
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million
 $ 6
years
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 ago, reaching
aproximantly
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approximately
 1
billion
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 $
last
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 year. Hong Kong showed
marginaly
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marginal
 growth from 0.3 to 0.8
billion
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 dollars. All other
countie's
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countries'
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export
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 was 6.3
before
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billion before
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 six
years
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 and
rise
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rose
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 to 11
billion
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 $ one year ago.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words export, billion, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "provide" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • bar chart
  • export markets
  • processed food
  • last year
  • six years ago
  • top market
  • rank
  • position
  • stay
  • move up
  • move down
  • rise
  • fall
  • increase
  • decrease
  • share
  • part
  • figure
  • amount
  • percentage
  • growth
  • decline
  • trend
  • overall
  • in contrast
  • however
  • similar
  • different
  • stable
  • describe
  • compare
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