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Some people spend their whole life living in one place. What are the advantage and disadvantages of this?

Some
people
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 spend their whole life living in
one
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place
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. What are the
advantage
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 and disadvantages of
this
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? It is widely acknowledged that most
people
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 prefer to live in their local area
than
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rather than
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migrating
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migrate
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 to another town.
This
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 essay will explore the positive and negative sides of that.
One
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 clear benefit of living in
one
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place
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 is
that
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is
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it
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 offers stability. Most individuals live in
one
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place
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 for almost 30 years or even
in
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for
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 their
life
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entire life
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 span. The particular reason for
this
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 circumstance is that most
people
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 are adapted to
one
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place
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. Knowing that, their living
place
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 has good orientation, comfort, safety, reliable
neighbors
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 and others. Having no other issue with their living
place
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, most
people
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admire
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continue to live. Nothing beats familiar
people
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instead
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 of strangers. There has been
conduction
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coverage
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 in
USA
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the USA
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 by BBC
news
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,
it
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which
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 shows that 80% of society
are
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is
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 satisfied with their current position. Even though they do not live in a luxurious or
in
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apply
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a
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modern flat, they choose their home. It is proven that
people
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 who adapt to their lovely location are not willing to change it.
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, there are plenty of
repercussion
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repercussions
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 of living in
one
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 site.
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, they could not adapt to other locations.
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, if there
will
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 be urgent evacuation,
folks
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people
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 are
ought
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expected
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 to
live
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leave
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 their home immediately,
result
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resulting
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 in missing or having
emotional
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an emotional
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 impact on humanity.
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, they will have narrowed down
horizons
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their horizons
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.
People
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 need to travel and live in several places, in order to enhance communication with other
peoples
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people
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. Most
people
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 could not see so many different astonishing locations, cutting-edge skyscrapers or abroad. Exchanging traditions
influence
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influences
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on
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the mindset of humans In conclusion,
people
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 have to go somewhere probably twice a month, to stay connected to fast
paced
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fast-paced
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 world. Being aware of
conditions
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the conditions
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 of other countries or districts may have led to mental nourishment

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organization
Plan your essay with a short plan before you write. Use a clear intro, two main ideas, and a clear finish.
coherence
Use linking words to show how ideas fit together, such as also, but, however, and for example.
grammar
Make sentences short and clear. Check long lines and fix any run-on bits.
task
When you use a fact or number, be careful. If you cannot be sure, say it as a guess or use a general idea.
lexical
Be simple in words. Use 'place' or 'home' with care and avoid many synonyms.
content
Clear plan to show both sides of the topic.
structure
Intro and conclusion are present and relate to the task.
Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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