The table shows results of surveys done in in 1980 and 2010 on various aspects of city living in a particular city. Units are measured in percentage?

The tables display the evaluation results of living in the city
according to
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different aspects in 1980 and 2010. The assessment was
according to
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public
facilities
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facilities'
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qualities and divided
in
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into
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three categories of how good or bad it was in percentage.
Overall
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,
year
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the year
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1980
have
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had
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better
result
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results
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as the total of good aspects
were
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was
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higher
while
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the bad
one
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ones
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were lower than in 2010. The highest aspect in 1980 was healthcare
and
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, and
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the lowest was
transport
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. Meanwhile, education was the best aspect of city living
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whereas
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, whereas
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transport
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was still the lowest aspect in 2010. In 1980, healthcare had the best quality with 82
percent
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per cent
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, followed by education and environment. These three aspects influenced the
community
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community's
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well-being, considering
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that those
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those
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they
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contribute
in
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to
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maintaining citizens' quality of life.
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, the satisfaction
of
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with
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shops, employment and
transport
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were
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was
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low. Many people gave high scores for bad,
comparing
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compared
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to others.
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, the
30 years
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30-year
gap changed education to lead
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while
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, while
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transport
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was getting worse and still
remain
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remains
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the lowest among all.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "according to, while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words transport with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • survey
  • percentage
  • trend
  • satisfaction
  • urban planning
  • public transportation
  • infrastructure
  • safety
  • security
  • perception
  • quality of life
  • amenities
  • development
  • legislation
  • initiatives
  • community well-being
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