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Band 5

You want to learn a language. A teacher who teaches this language lives near the area where you live. Write a letter to the teacher. In your letter: - say how you came to know about him/her - explain why you want to learn this language - ask what help he/she can offer

Dear Sir, I am writing
this
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 letter to inform
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you about
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about
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of
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 my interest
about
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in
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 learning
a
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the
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french
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French
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language
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 from you.
To begin
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 with, I have seen an advertisement in the local newspaper mentioning
about
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apply
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your institution
which
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, which
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are
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specialized
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 in teaching the
french
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language
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 in 12 weeks.
Moreover
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, my friend
also
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 suggested
about
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that
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 your
class
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which
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are
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is
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 engaging and
thought provoking
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. It is mandatory to learn the
french
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language
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 in order to boost my CRS score for claiming the Canadian PR.
Furthermore
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, learning
this
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language
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 would be an
assest
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asset
 because most of the jobs in
canada
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Canada
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 demands to have
french
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 fluency. To
add
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sum
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 up, it can
also
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helps
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help
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 to foster my networking skills across the globe. I would be delighted if you would provide me
the
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with the
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 detailed course plan so that I can
enroll
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enrol
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 in your
class
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 as soon as possible.
In addition
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, I would prefer to have
in
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an
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person
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in-person
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class
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 rather than
online
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an online
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class
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. I hope to get
prompt
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 response from you in
this
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 matter. Yours faithfully, Dell

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organization
One idea per paragraph helps the reader. Split long ideas or move extra points to another paragraph.
language
Fix grammar and spelling mistakes, and use 'French' with a capital F.
task response
Add more detail about the help you want from the teacher, such as the level, dates, and how often you wish to meet.
tone
Formal tone and polite closing
content
Clear reason to learn and request for a course plan
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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