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Band 2.5

Some people think that it is more effective for people living in urban areas while others believe that it is better for them to living in rural areas. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

In recent years, it
is
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has been
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 argued that people living in urban areas have more benefits
,
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;
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however
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, it seems to me that people living in rural areas
also
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 benefit. In
this
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 essay,
i
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I
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 would
to
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like to
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 shed light on these viewpoints.
On the other hand
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, community living in urban
field
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fields
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,
that
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where
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they
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there
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can
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are
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 numerous businesses and startups in cities. It is flexible and valuable. What is more,
crowd
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the crowd
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 can approach modern amenities shopping malls, hotels and so on.
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 that, when
community
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communities
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 live in urban
operation
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areas
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, they have many opportunities at work to develop in the future.
community
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The community
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 can enjoy experiencing the superior infrastructure, high-quality schools and hospitals.
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, I think
,
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apply
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 that public living in rural breadth, have benefits.
public
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The public
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 can enjoy the fresh atmosphere in rural areas. What is more, folk can avoid pollution to improve stay health and avoid Disease.
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 that, many children can play sports for well- well-being and develop a multitude.
population
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The population
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 can
also
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 plant a tree to relax and explore new activities in rural
operation
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operations
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. In a word, it is vital to accept that
nation
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a nation
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 can enjoy experiencing the superior infrastructure, high-quality schools and hospitals
,
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;
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however
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,
i
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I
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 assert that people living in rural
operation
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areas
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is
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are
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also
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 important to avoid much pollution.v

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task
Be clear about your view in one short line at the start. Then say why you think that way, and end with a short close.
coherence
Make links between ideas clear. Use small words like and, but, so, also. Put ideas in set groups and do not mix them.
grammar
Use easy words. Many may be not in the top 100. Check big mistakes like I/I, capital, and wrong words like to/too, there, their.
idea
You talk about both sides of the topic.
structure
You try to use more than one idea in a paragraph.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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