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The maps below shows the changes that took place in Bridgetown in 1700 and 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The provided maps illustrate the changes that took place in Bridgetown over
a
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the
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 period
of
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from
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 1700 and 2000.
Overall
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, there had been several modifications, the most noticeable being the reconstruction of
school
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the school
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 and
introduction
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the introduction
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 of a bypass,
railway
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a railway
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 line.
To begin
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 with 1700s, the town was quite simple and without any modifications. There was an enormous castle on the northeast side of the territory. There was a wooden area
,
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apply
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 near the
market place
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marketplace
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. In the
center
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centre
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 of the map, running from the northwest to southeast, was
located
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a long road with
the
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a
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 bridge in the middle.
Additionally
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, a river
from
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running from
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southwest
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the southwest
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 to
northeast
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the northeast
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 side was running
and
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, and
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 farmland in the Southeast part. By 2000, the town had experienced many makeovers. Specifically, a school was
build
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built
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, which resulted in the disappearance of Castle.
Then
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,
the
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in the
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 area
,
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apply
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 where a lot of trees were, by that year
fewer
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, fewer
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 trees
left
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were left
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. And it is because of the expansion of Market
place
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marketplace
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. To shorten the long roadway, in the middle, a bypass was introduced on
two
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both
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 sides of
this
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 road.
In
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On
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 the other side, particularly
on
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in
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 the north-west, a railway was established
and
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, and
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 it was above the river, from North to East. A bridge and farmland remained without any changes.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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