The bar chart shows the percentage of school children learning to play different musical instruments in 2005, 2010, and 2015.

The bar chart displayed the ratio of four musical instruments which were studied by students in 2005, 2010 and 2015.
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, there were significant increases of children who learned guitar and piano.
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, the number of kids who were studying drum and violin remained stayed same during that period. If it is zoomed in to each instrument, over 10 per
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of pupils were studying guitar in 2005, and
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ratio grew incredibly to about 20 per
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of kids after five years, and
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it was over 25 per
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of school-age children in 2015. With a similar trend, piano players were nearly 10 per
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of the total number of students in 2005. It rose dramatically to about 17 per
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of total pupils in 2010 and reached 25 per
cent
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in 2015. The proportion of students in both of drum and the violin was approximately maintained between 5 per
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and 10 per
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of the total number of school-aged youths. But the proportion of drum players became slightly higher than violin players in 2015,
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of lower than it was in the
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ten years.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words cent with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage
  • musical instruments
  • school children
  • trends
  • popularity
  • increases
  • decreases
  • comparison
  • analysis
  • demographic factors
  • societal trends
  • educational policies
  • influence
  • cultural development
  • accessibility
  • musical education
  • participation
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