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Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

In the prevailing era, learning
second
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a second
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language
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 is critical in order to explore new opportunities. A number of schools
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 teaching
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a second
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at
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 primary school.
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 trend has more pros than cons. Commencing with the most salient benefit of starting
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a foreign
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language
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 at primary school is to improve
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 proficiency. At an early
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, learners have a greater ability to
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absorb
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due to
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developing
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the developing
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 brain
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whereas
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 adolescents may find
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it difficult
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 to
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 rules,
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 correctly, and many more.
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, if children learn French at a young
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, they can speak very well
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 their later life.
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,
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 intends to spread awareness about diverse
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cultures
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,
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, and
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the history
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 of foreign
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cultures
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 that normally promote empathy, tolerance, and global understanding from an early
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 towards other people. On the other
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,
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the drawbacks
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 of
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 trend cannot be overlooked. The prominent one is that it leads to an increase in academic pressure. Learners already face some challenges in their school curriculum
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 stiff competition. Having an extra subject can put
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 on their
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brains,
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for they
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 find difficulties to focus on their study. To illustrate, core subjects,
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 as mathematics, science, and
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 may seem difficult to understand for many of them, and having a foreign
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 subject can create undue stress.
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,
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 having a
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 subject can put
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a burden
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 on their brains is the main drawback of
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 trend, I contend that ameliorating
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 expertise and culture awareness are
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apply
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of
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among
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 the major benefits of learning
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a second
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langauge
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language
 at an early
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.

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grammar
Use clear, simple lines. Start with your view in the first paragraph and use one idea per sentence.
structure
Plan the work. Make 4 parts: intro, 2 body parts, and end. Put one main idea in each part.
vocabulary
Fix bad spell and word use. Use common words from the top 100 list.
content
Give more real examples or numbers to show your point.
content
The writer shows a clear view on the topic.
coherence
There are good linking words to move from one idea to the next.
task
The piece tries to cover both sides and ends with a view.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • cognitive abilities
  • pronunciation
  • self-conscious
  • cultural awareness
  • global society
  • proficiency levels
  • competitive job market
  • foundational skills
  • qualified teachers
  • recreational activities
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