THE PIE CHART SHOW THE REASONS PEOPLE IN GREAT BRITIAN HAD FOR VISITING ART MUSEUMS IN THE YEARS 1990 and 2000

The pie presents data on the purposes for visiting
art
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museums in Scotland, England and Wales in 1990 and 2000.
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, learning and gaining knowledge
was
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were
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the biggest
reason
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reasons
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of
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for
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visit
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visits
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in both years.
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the diagram, learning and gaining knowledge
make
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up the largest share in 1990 and 2000, at 44% and 45%, respectively.
Whereas
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the proportion of filling travel schedules constituted 27% in 1990, decreasing to 12% after 10 years, the percentage of attending a special exhibit increased from 12% to 18%. In 1990, individuals went to
art
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museums in order to spend time with friends and family
,
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at 12%,
this
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grew by 5% points by 2000. As for buying
art
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, people barely visited
such
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places to purchase
art
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, at just 1%, reaching 5% in 2000,
while
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other reasons accounted for 4%, declining to 3% after 10 years.

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