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the bar chart below shows the US top 10 processed food Export Markets for last year and six years ago

The chart illustrates the top 10
exports
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 for US processed foods , comparing figures from
last
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 year with those from six years ago.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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exports
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 increased in almost all listed countries At the top of the ranking is Canada, where
exports
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 rose from about 9.3 six years ago to 13.2
last
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 year Mexico is the second largest market ,
also
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 showing growth from approximately 4.0 to 6.0. A significant increase can
also
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 be seen in the European Union, where
exports
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 grew from 2.6 to 4.4. Japan, China and South Korea
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, although
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although
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however
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, show moderate increases. China
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in
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, in
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 particular, experienced a notable rise, with
exports
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 growing from roughly 0.8 to 2.1, almost tripling over the period. The Philippines, Australia and Hong Kong
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 recorded growth,
although
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 their figures remain lower compared to the largest Food export markets.
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, Australia and Hong KONG were the same 6 years ago,
whereas
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last
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 year it increased slightly to 1.0 and 0.8, respectively The Rest of the World category shows a strong rise as well it increasing from 6.3 to 11.0. It highlights all
increasing
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the increases
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from
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in
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 Export Markets

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, although, last".
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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words exports with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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