The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries.

The given line graph illustrates the proportion of aged people in three countries, the USA,

Japan

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, and

Sweden

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, over a period of 100 years, starting from 1940.

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although

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the percentage of the elderly in all countries experienced an increase throughout the period, the sharpest trend could be expected for

Japan

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. At the beginning of the period, individuals aged 65 and over accounted for just under 10 % of the population.

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it increased by around 5% until 2025.

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Sweden

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and

Japan

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began around 7% and exactly 5% respectively.

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there was a sharp upward trend for

Sweden

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, approximetly 13%, 5% increase could be seen for

Japan

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, from 1940 to 2025. Surprisingly, between 2025 and 2040,

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the rate of old people in

Japan

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is expected to rocket by 15%, the same trends are expected for both

Sweden

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and the USA.

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Dec 12, 2025

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Vocabulary: Replace the words japan, sweden with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "proportion" in your introduction.

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