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Space exploration costs taxpayers an exorbitant amount of money each year. What are the advantages and disadvantages of spending money on space exploration?

In today's society , space travel is one of the leading topics among people.
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, its exploration and analysis costs an enormous amount of taxpayer money each year. For some people, it may seem insignificant , and it is
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 a waste of time and money. For others, it is a new revolutionary topic that needs to be studied. For those reasons, in
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 essay, I will be discussing both advantages and disadvantages. On the one hand, exploring the space is important.
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 ever-growing populations and massive loss of irreplaceable resources of the earth. It can be considered one of the most important research areas, which will help humanity and save its life on Earth. Investigating
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 in space can lead to going to other planets to live there.
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, studying the outer zone might help people to understand more about the universe.
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, others argue that, before knowing more about the world itself , it must be protected. They say that saving their homeworld should be a priority.
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, taxpayers' money should go to medicine or environmental issues that need to be prioritised.
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, pollutions
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 as air, water, land and others, for medicine for all kinds of cancer research and studies. Paying attention to these things could potentially save the
earth
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 we live
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. Suffice it to say, both sides have a strong argument that can lead to new things, but it is not entirely useless to study around our solar system.

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Task Response
State a clear view in the final part and keep a single stance on the topic.
Structure
Use clear topic sentences in each paragraph and end with a short conclusion that states your view.
Language
Use only simple words and short sentences. Check word order and small grammar errors.
Content
Give one or two simple examples that fit the point you make about space work.
Structure
Clear layout: intro, two body parts, and a wrap-up.
Content
Shows both sides of the issue.
Coherence
Some good link words to move ideas.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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