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The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in an European country bbetween 1979 and 2004

The line chart given displays different individual chicken, beef, lamb, and fish
consumption
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 in
grams
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 in an unnamed European country from 1979 to 2004.
Overall
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, the provided data shows changes in meat
consumption
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 except for fish
which
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, which
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 stay relatively stable
troughout
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throughout
 the chart.
While
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 beef and lamb show a decrease, chicken
consumption
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 grew over the year,
even
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and even
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become
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became
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 the most
consumpitioned
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consumed
 in recent years. Beef and lamb show a
simmilar
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similar
 decline over 25
years
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25-year
 period. Both
reach
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reached
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its
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their
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 lowest in around 1999 to 2004. Fish
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on
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, on
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 the other hand, is relatively stable even though it had decreased just a little from over 50
grams
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 in 1979 to below 50
grams
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 weekly
consumption
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 across the chart. Chicken
consumption
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 shows a rough
,
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apply
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 yet steady increase. Starting from just
belom
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below
 150
grams
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 weekly in 1979, it had
rose
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risen
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 and peaked at around 250
grams
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 per week in
the
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apply
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the period of 1999 to 2004.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words consumption, grams with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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