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The advantages and disadvantages of working as a journalist.

Journalism remains one of the most vital and engaging professions in contemporary society. Many people claim that acquiring non-essential data or insights for news reports may positively affect the audience. What is more, mature individuals conducting
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 type of career are often, frequently, not cognizant of adversely affecting the readership. The following article takes a look at both sides of the argument. First of all, it is worth considering the salaries. International research has found that journalists earn up to $10,000 per month.
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 nature of worldwide employment gives you
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 higher-watered experience and opportunity to enhance your abilities and knowledge by,
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, obtaining information about external traditions and interacting with well-known individuals or celebrities. Or, even, it can lead to public recognition of your appearance.
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, being a journalist has its disadvantages.
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, it is essential to provide a positive attitude to society.
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, a large number of your leisure weekend hours should have been spent on your career,
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 significantly matters and in the worst case, it can negatively impact some
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 type of occupation. As far as I'm concerned, journalism will extend more widely.
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, in my opinion, it should have been more
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 in terms of trust and probability of compliance with reality.

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task
Improve your task response by making a clear view in the intro and ending with a strong, short summary backed by the main points.
task
The essay needs more detail on each point. Add facts or examples and explain how they show good or bad sides of the job.
content
The writer tries to cover both sides of the topic.
style
Some sentences are easy to read and understand.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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