The map below is of the town of Garlsdon and shows two possible sites for a new supermarket. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The map illustrates two potential locations for the planned supermarket in the town of Garlsdon.
Overall
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, it is apparent that the sites are expected to be in the countryside and the town centre.
According to
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the layout, Garlsdon has about 65,000
population
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residents
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, which is higher than all other towns'
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of residents nearby. Bransdon's inhabitants are more than Hindon's 10,000, at 15,000, but less than Cransdon's 29,000. Hindon, Bransdon and Cransdon are 12 km, 16 km and 25 km away from Garlsdon, respectively. There are three main roads that lead to these towns and one railway. As for the area itself, outside the housing and industry
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is in the north and
south
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south,
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there is a countryside
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where
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the first supermarket is going to
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in the north-western side. The map illustrates that the second supermarket is planned to be constructed in the town centre, which has no traffic zone.

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