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People living in the 21st century have a better quality of life than the previous centuries. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is widely believed that today's
people
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 live better than earlier
people
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. I agree with
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 view for several reasons, one of which is the development of technology. I maintain that other aspects need consideration,
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 as fewer health problems. With regard to the prior century,
people
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 tended to live more peacefully and more slowly , and
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 they had fewer health problems. These conditions cause a lot of inner diseases, including digestive, neural and cardiovascular system problems. Without these reasons, old
people
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would have became
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became
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become
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 healthier than
people
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 in the 21st century.
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,
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 circumstance
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 helped to make their relationship stronger.
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, the old generation spent more time with family and community, which naturally reduced
phychological
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psychological
 depression. With the advent of technology,
life
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 is becoming easier day by day.
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 is primarily because
people
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 use different types of gadgets,
transports
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transport
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, and domestic machines in their daily
life
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, which help to earn money, reduce distinction. If they use domestic machines, they will gain a lot of time. They can spend
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 time more wisely in order to do more beneficial activities
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 as learning a new language or skill, reading books which secure their quality of
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 and future career. Take Japan as an example, where
people
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 use a lot of modern technology
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 for that reason
their
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, their
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 living conditions are better than
of
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those of
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 most countries. In conclusion, every century has a beneficial side to improve standards of living.
Previous
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People
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people
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 lived more slowly than today
when
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, when
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live
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life
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being
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is
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 faster. Technological development has made
life
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 easier and significantly improved
overall
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 well-being.

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task response
Task response: state a clear position at the start and keep it through the text. In each paragraph give one clear idea with a short, close reason.
coherence
Coherence and cohesion: use linking phrases to move from one idea to the next. Make each paragraph focus on one main point.
grammar
Grammar and form: fix run-on sentences, comma use, and word order. Use simple sentence forms.
lexical
Lexis: choose simple and exact words. avoid wrong word choice and spelling errors.
examples
Examples: give more concrete, related examples to back up each point.
task response
Clear stance is shown early and repeated.
coherence
There are connecting words that help flow.
content
The topic is on life quality and technology, which is a good idea for this prompt.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Technological advancements
  • Healthcare improvements
  • Economic growth
  • Social changes
  • Global connectivity
  • Standard of living
  • Life expectancy
  • Gender equality
  • Legal rights
  • Globalization
  • Cultural exchange
  • Access to information
  • Environmental concerns
  • Sustainable development
  • Stress levels
  • Quality of life
  • Medical progress
  • Job opportunities
  • Income disparity
  • Life satisfaction
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