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Band 2.5

People are surrounded by many kinds of advertising, which can influence their life. Is it a positive or negative trend?

In
this
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 modern world
people
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, people
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 are surrounded by many kinds of advertising
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, this
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this
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which
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definitly
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definitely
 influences their
life
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lives
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. In my
opinion
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opinion,
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this
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 is a negative trend
and
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, and
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 in
this
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essay
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essay,
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 I will give you some reasons to explain my position. First of
all
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all,
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 having advertising around you can set up a standard
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wich
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which
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 can not
be
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apply
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always be
accuarate
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accurate
 to the reality of everyone,
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wich
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which
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 can
ended
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end
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 up with a
feelling
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feeling
 of no belonging to
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 society. Second of
all
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all,
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 advertising is
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base
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based
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in
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on
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 money or
adquisicion
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acquisition
 power,
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wich
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which
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 can stress you out
abour
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about
 can afford it or not.
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Conversely
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Conversely,
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 advertising can
also
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 be very
imformative
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informative
 and help you to make
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a desicion
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desicion
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decision
 about what to get
according to
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 your own needs.
To sum up
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, I really think that advertising is informative and
usefull
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useful
but
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, but
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 having many
aorund
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around
 you
also
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 sets standards,
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wich
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which
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 can stress you and create
some
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a
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feelling
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feeling
 of no belonging.

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improvement
Use one main idea per paragraph and add a simple example to back it up.
language
Fix common spellings and use easy words.
structure
End with a strong line that repeats your big point.
strength
The plan is clear and easy to follow.
strength
There are sign words like First and Second to show order.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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