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Band 3.5

The plans below show the site of an airport now and how it will look after redevelopment next year. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two plans show
a
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 site of an
airport
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.
One
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 plan includes the renovation of the
airport
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 next year, and the other includes the
airport
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 infrastructure plan now.
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, there is a huge difference between before and after the renovation of the
airport
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. The
number
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 of gates will increase,
along with
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 other new facilities, next year. Currently, the
airport
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 has a check-in
area
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 in the west and a cafe on the east
side
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 of the security passport control system. There is no facility available in the passport control system. There are a total of eight gates in the
airport
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, and there is only a walkway between gate
number
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one
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 and gate
number
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 three. The
airport
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 has only
one
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 arrivals entrance and
one
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 departures entrance. The
airport
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after
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, after
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 the
redevelopment
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redevelopment,
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 will have a check-in
area
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 on the east
side
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 and a bag drop
area
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to
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 the right
side
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 of the cafe. In the passport control
custom
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area
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, a new cafe will open
to
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 the right
side
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 of the ATM machine in the future. In the same
area
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, there will be a new place for car hire in the southeast. The
number
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 of gates will expand to eighteen, and a sky train will take the place of the walkway.
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, the entrance areas for arrivals and departures will expand at the
airport
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.

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task-response
Task response needs a clear view of the main facts and a fair balance of both plans. Put the future plan and the current plan in two clear parts, and then make a short overall view of the big changes.
coherence
Coherence and cohesion needs a steady flow. Use clear linkers to connect ideas and group ideas by plan (current vs future) as separate paragraphs.
content
The writer names many plan parts, like gates, sky train, cafe, car hire.
structure
A short overall view at the start shows the big change.
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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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