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Many students today graduate high school and want to continue studying overseas in another country. Give the advantages and disadvantages of studying abroad.

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 for many reasons.First,make new friends.
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study
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 the
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himself
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.Second,
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students
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university,
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 have new
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.
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universities
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 have some programs
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student
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 must participate in
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volunteer
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student
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students
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lean
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gain
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anew experience
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experience anew
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.
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study
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 they learn about different cultures.
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, almost universally has a diversity of people
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students
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 learn about
another
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 cultures faster. On the other
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 has some disadvantages.
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 has many advantages .
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countries
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make
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filling
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 lonely.
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make
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make
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filling
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 homesick.
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 can’t come
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 are
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walking
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are
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task response
To raise your score, add a clear plan: start with a short intro, give two clear parts about pros and cons, then a short conclusion that states your view.
coherence cohesion
Make your ideas flow well. Use separate paragraphs and start each with a topic sentence. Use words that show order (first, next, finally). Keep ideas in a logical order.
coherence cohesion
The essay shows an attempt to cover both sides of the topic.
content
There are some examples that point to real situations like feeling lone or far away from home.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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