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Band 5.5

The charts show world pineapple exports by the top three pineapple-producing countries in 2009 and 2019, and a breakdown of the cost to the consumer of each pineapple in 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

There are two different
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chart
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charts
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that
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is
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are
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 given, a bar
chart
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 showing
exports
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 by
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the world
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world
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world's
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 top three
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pineapple producers
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pineapple-producing
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 nations by metric
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tones
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tons
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 in 2009 and 2019, and a pie
chart
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 displaying the breakdown of
pineaplle
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pineapple
 cost to the consumer in 2019.
Overall
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, data from
bar
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the bar
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chart
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tell
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tells
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 us that
country
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 A shows the biggest growth in
pineapple
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exports
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,
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;
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in contrast
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,
country
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B
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B's
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export
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's
declined
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exports declined
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 in 2019 compared to 2009.
On the other hand
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,
country
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 C is relatively stable in exporting
pineapple
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.
For the
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The
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 pie
chart
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,
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apply
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it
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apply
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shows that the highest price of
pineapple
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come
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comes
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 from distribution and retail.
Informations
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Information
 from
bar
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the bar
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chart
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show
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shows
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 that
country
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 A gained about 8 to 9
meetric
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metric
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tones
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tons
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 more
pineaplle
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pineapple
exports
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 compared to 2009
which
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, which
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 is only below 2 metric
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tones
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tons
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.
Country
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 B shows a different trend with lower
exports
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 in 2019
which
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, which
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 is only just below 2 metric
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tones
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tons
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 compared to
2009
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2009,
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where
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when
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 they
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export
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exported
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 over 4 metric
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tones
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tons
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 of
pineapple
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.
Lastly
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,
Country
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 C shows almost no difference in
pineapple
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exports
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with
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, with
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 only a slight increase in 2019, still far below 2 metric
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tones
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tons
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 both in 2009 and 2019. The pie
chart
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 tells us that
pineapple
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 cost
are
Verb problem
of pineapple is
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 affected by 7 parts
,
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:
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 producer,
export
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 costs, international transport, import licences, profit, taxes, and
lastly
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 distribution and retail. The part that
affect
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affects
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 the price the most is distribution and retail
which
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, which
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 contains 35 per cent of
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pineapple
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the pineapple
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 price. International transport, import license, taxes, and profit have
similar
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a similar
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 part with 12 to 18 per cent. Producer and
export
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cost
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costs
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also
Verb problem
are also
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 similar, but lower
with
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by
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 4 to 5
peer
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per
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 cent.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "lastly".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words chart, exports, pineapple, tones, country, export with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 7 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 5 times.
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