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The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries.

The line graph compares three different countries
the
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 percentage of people aged 65 and over from 1940 and 2040.
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,
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areas
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area's
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 population experienced upward trends.
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USA
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the USA
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 showed the highest proportion in the beginning, Japan is expected to become the most populous country over the period. As the graph shows, there
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 roughly 10% people aged 65 and over in 1940. It increased steadily to exactly 15% after four decades, but
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 it showed a slight decrease to around 14% in 2020. A sharp rise
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the
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 percentage of people aged 65 and over to approximately 22% which will become the least populous country
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 of the period. Regarding Sweden, its population started at almost 7% in 1940
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this
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 grew constantly, with some fluctuation, reaching 25% in 2040.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 73%.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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