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The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps illustrate a public
park
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 called Grange
Park
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 when it
initially
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 opened in 1920 and how it looks now.
Overall
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, the
park
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 layout has been updated to include modern facilities, which have replaced some natural features. The updates have improved the
park
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's accessibility and functionality. The two entrances on Arnold Avenue and Eldon
Street
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 have remained unchanged.
However
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, the
park
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 now has an underground car
park
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, and a right side entrance from Eldon
Street
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 was constructed for car
park
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 users. Once inside the
park
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 from Eldon
Street
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, the central
feature
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 used to be a fountain, which has now been replaced by a rose garden surrounded by seats. To the right of the Elton
Street
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 entrance, a water
feature
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 has been added, taking the place of the previous glasshouse and seating area. A cafe and children's play area now occupy the space where the rose garden and water plants' pond used to be, opposite the water
feature
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. The
park
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's left side, which previously housed a stage for musicians, now features an amphitheatre. The only unchanged
feature
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 in
this
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 area is the rose garden on the Arnold Avenue side.

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task response
To raise your band, add more exact places and show how they were in 1920 and now. Have a short plan at the start and a clear ending.
coherence cohesion
Link ideas with a clear order and use words like first, next, and then. Check spellings of place names so they stay the same.
structure
Clear overall idea and good summary of changes.
content
Good detail about entrances and new features.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • alterations
  • renovations
  • modernize
  • upgraded
  • transformed
  • landscaping
  • facilities
  • amenities
  • preservation
  • heritage
  • green spaces
  • eco-friendly
  • public space
  • community impact
  • historical elements
  • conservation
  • recreational areas
  • urban planning
  • sustainable development
  • layout
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