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Band 4.5

The graph below gives information about how much people in the United States and the United Kingdom spend on petrol. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph illustrates information
of
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about
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people
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 with
diverses
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diverse
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income
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incomes
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 and how they
pend
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depend
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 on
fule
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fuel
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 in the United States and the United Kingdom.
Overall
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,
in
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it
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 can be seen that in
US
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the US
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Punctuation problem
, peopel
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peopel
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people
 who
were
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are
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 poor spend more on
ptrol
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petrol
 than
richest
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the richest
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,
while
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 in
UK
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the UK
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,
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high
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high-income
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incmoe
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people
 spend much more than
poorest
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the poorest
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 and middle-
income
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.
Firstly
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, in the United States,
poorest
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the poorest
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people
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has
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have
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 the largest
percent
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per cent
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 of
income
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around
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, around
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 5%,
by
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contrast
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contrast,
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 the
percent
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per cent
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 decline with middle-
income
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people
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. Looking at
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the richest
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richest
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richest,
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 where they had the lowest
income
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.
Moreover
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, low and
middle
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middle-income
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income
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households
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 in
US
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the US
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 spent more on
fule
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fuel
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 than UK.
Secondly
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, in the United Kingdom, the
welthy
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wealthy
people
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 spend
have
Verb problem
apply
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the largest
percent
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percentage
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 of
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income
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their income
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 and spend money on petrol,
while
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poorest
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the poorest
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accounted
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account
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 for 0.5 %
income
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. The more
income
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 they have, the more
spend
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they spend
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 on
fule
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fuel
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, income with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • expenditures
  • disparities
  • evolved
  • fluctuations
  • stabilization
  • significant gap
  • trends
  • economic conditions
  • vehicular technology
  • public transportation
  • summarise
  • comparison
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