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The table below give information about sales of fairtrade-labeled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries

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of
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fairtrade-labelled
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Fairtrade-labelled
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 coffee and
bananas
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banana
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sales
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 in five European countries in 1999 and 2004.
Overall
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, the number of coffee
sales
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 in the UK had a greater increase compared to other nations,
whereas
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 Switzerland had the highest growth in banana
sales
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. The only two countries
who
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 faced a
deacrese
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decrease
 in
sales
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, in both
tables
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tables,
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 are Sweden and Denmark in
sales
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 of bananas. The coffee
sales
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 experienced an increase in all five countries
,
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 only the UK rose by 18.5 million.
Switzerland
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Switzerland's
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sales
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 doubled in 2004,
while
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 Denmark and Sweden had
equal
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raise
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 by 0.2m. Belgium only grew by 0.7.
Sales
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 of bananas in Switzerland had a 32m
raise
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rise
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 by 2004
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on the other
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hand
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hand,
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 both Sweden and Denmark witnessed a drop in the amount of
sales
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 by 0.8m and 1.1m respectively. The UK and Belgium
sales
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 increased considerably by 4.5m and 3,4m.

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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sales, m with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "tables" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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