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Some people think that art lessons, such as painting and drawing lessons, should be compulsory in secondary schools. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

B. It approaches EK. In Chris Kelly’s notes, the undershoot is the moment when the “
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 to potassium once again far outweighs that to sodium, so the cell approaches EK.” K+ permeability can even become “so high … that the cell goes closer to EK than during RMP, it
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.” C. Most Ca+2 comes in on the falling phase of the spike. In fact, the slide says it exactly
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 phase of AP.” And it
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 adds “tail current is important!”

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • foster
  • creativity
  • self-expression
  • curriculum
  • mental well-being
  • stress reduction
  • unearth
  • hidden talents
  • compulsory
  • equality
  • disengagement
  • motivation
  • additional resources
  • financial strain
  • core subjects
  • well-rounded
  • critical thinking
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