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IN SOME COUNTRIES OWING THE HOME RATHER THEN RENTING ONE IS IMPORTANT ? WHYS MIGHT BE THE CASE DO YOU THINK IT IS A POSITIVE SIDE OR NEGATIVE.

In many countries, an increasing number of people choose to rent a
home
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 rather than own one. I strongly believe that it is a negative development because it
lead
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leads
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 to
finiancial
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financial
 insecurity and
lack
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a lack
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 of long-term stability.
Owing
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Owning
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 a
home
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 can provide security and financial stability. Unlike renting, which can negatively affect
on
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an
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 individual's
budgets
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budget
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, especially as rental prices are steadily increasing.
In addition
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, frequent relocation can place the person under
stress
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stress,
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affect
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affecting
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 their well-being .
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, tenants
my
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may
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 be required to leave the
home
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 unexpectedly.
Furthermore
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, renters are restricted
to make
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from making
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 changes to their living space, which reduces the level of comfort and personal satisfaction.
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, if someone
to
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needs to
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 redecorate or fix something may need
permit
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a permit
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 for changing procedures.
To conclude
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, it's important to have a
home
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 and more properties if possible because it gives people independence and freedom.

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content
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strategy
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content
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structure
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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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